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shadow900
26 Mar 2007, 18:39
Just a quick sketch I made when I was bored.
http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs14/f/2007/084/f/7/Annelid__ish_Thing_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/51653892/
Helpful Criticism is appreciated. :)

Liketyspli
26 Mar 2007, 18:54
A little less overbite and the eyes more to the front of the worm.

shadow900
26 Mar 2007, 18:56
A little less overbite and the eyes more to the front of the worm.
Thanks! :)
Next time, I'll compare the drawing with an official drawing, to see the mistakes I've made ;)

Liketyspli
26 Mar 2007, 19:00
Thanks! :)
Next time, I'll compare the drawing with an official drawing, to see the mistakes I've made ;)You're welcome.

Plasma
26 Mar 2007, 19:38
Also, try to make the lines darker. They're a little hard to see there.

Paul.Power
26 Mar 2007, 20:42
I agree about making the lines darker. Either fiddle with the contrast, or use a layered imaging program to trace the lines.
And yeah, may be an idea to reduce that overbite, although there are questions of style I guess.
It's pretty nice, though. Next thing is to try different poses and costumes.

Pigbuster
26 Mar 2007, 22:03
I like the big overbite, personally.
Don't be so jittery with your lines. The eyes are really rough. Try to make it cleaner.
And yes, find a way to change the contrast (turn it up) because it's really hard to make out right now.

Oft99
27 Mar 2007, 19:38
Yes. My style, for example, has a big overbite as one of it's features.
As piggy has said. Cleaner and darker lines that aren't so scribbley.

Kelster23
28 Mar 2007, 06:10
My style has a bigger overbite as well. Just make it clearer, and after that, you'll be off to a great start!
Good luck!

SupSuper
28 Mar 2007, 18:13
Helpful Critism (Firefox is telling me I'm not spelling it right and not giving me the proper way, how do you spell it?) is appreciated. :)Helpful Criticism

Akuryou13
29 Mar 2007, 02:15
the lip size is fine, but I think the problem with the lip area is the head, actually. perhaps it's only because the eyes are so far to the right, but the head looks overly-large and it needs to be thinned out.
plus the whole darker lines thing.
aside from that it's pretty good, actually. good job.

shadow900
29 Mar 2007, 21:29
So pretty much:
Fix lines (Cleaner, darker etc)
Less overbite, or leave it. I guess it's opinion?
Fix eyes
Fix head
Anything else?
Also, I have GIMP, I'm not that bad with it, I'll try to mess around with it now.
Ah, yes. Lastly, thank you for the praise and criticism! :)

shadow900
31 Mar 2007, 14:22
UPDATE:
Decided to Ink up the drawing and add colors to the Letters.
http://ic3.deviantart.com/fs13/f/2007/089/0/6/Annelid__ish_Thing_Inked_Up_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52049381/
Better or worse?

Akuryou13
31 Mar 2007, 14:51
a bit rough as far as the lines go, but for a start that is absolutely amazing. keep at it. you should be interesting to keep an eye on.

AndrewTaylor
31 Mar 2007, 16:04
Better or worse?
...the same?
It looks better, because it's clearer, but... it's still the same picture -- the eyes are still too far to the right and the overbite is still a bit larger than T17 draw it.
(Oddly enough the eyes are in almost exactly the right place relative to the lower jaw.)

shadow900
3 Apr 2007, 21:57
a bit rough as far as the lines go, but for a start that is absolutely amazing. keep at it. you should be interesting to keep an eye on.
Thank you!
I might have to start to try coloring it, but then again I was never really a coloring person. ;)

Oft99
9 Apr 2007, 14:51
UPDATE:
Decided to Ink up the drawing and add colors to the Letters.
http://ic3.deviantart.com/fs13/f/2007/089/0/6/Annelid__ish_Thing_Inked_Up_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52049381/
Better or worse?
Better. A little.
But try to make the eyes look even. The right eye has a big bump sticking out of the side of it.
And move both of the eyes to the left.
@everyone: The overbite is FINE! it's a style thing.

hdhdhd
14 Apr 2007, 13:12
Compared to my blah-art, that's great the way it is! And since you inked it, now I can see the topsy-turvy words at the bottom!

shadow900
19 Apr 2007, 00:54
Compared to my blah-art, that's great the way it is! And since you inked it, now I can see the topsy-turvy words at the bottom!
For other people, they say:
lol, peanuts, fudge, shoopwoop.
Don't ask. :p

yauhui
29 Apr 2007, 09:48
why does this end here? add summore sketchy stuff!

shadow900
5 Sep 2007, 03:10
why does this end here? add summore sketchy stuff!
Heh, I should, shouldn't I?
I did draw some new stuff, but I never got to scan it.
I'll try to look for them...

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